The following was written while waiting for the train in the railway station! Though a slightly amateurish one, this is my first try at poetry and hence its pretty special....
During moments of despair,
When the heart feels insecure,
A blitz emerges from somewhere,
and reminds of all your goals that you need to procure.
The mind adopts self defense,
Re-emphasizing its stand of supreme control,
Placing its counterpart inside a well secured fence,
Knowing well that it is still so much out of control.
But you finally decide to crown the mind,
Knowing that best decisions are made in that case,
And you allow the heart to assist and bind,
With the 'all powerful' mind as the base.
Thursday, November 04, 2004
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This was written when i was waiting in the bus station.. Hope u like it..
I went there,
she came here..
He went there,
they came here.
Nowhere to go,
everywhere to go,
i dont know
they care not.
Why, i dont know
where, they cant know,
so, u are what
that i dont know!!
-***kki
First attempt. OK. Welcome. There's not much of poetry in it thou :-D
thaanga mudiyalai
:p
ish.
Hey sanket, was waiting for ur comments! Actually nothing special about the supposed to be poem ;) apart from the context.. Instead of writing it as normal sentences, thot i shall put in a slightly different way.. but believe me it was way too wierd thinking bout rhyming words etc..defeats the very purpose of what you want to say..
Hey sanket, was waiting for ur comments! Actually nothing special about the supposed to be poem ;) apart from the context.. Instead of writing it as normal sentences, thot i shall put in a slightly different way.. but believe me it was way too wierd thinking bout rhyming words etc..defeats the very purpose of what you want to say..
Rhyme? Thinking about rhyming words? Well.. were u trying to write a poem or a rhyme? Probably this *should* have been a poem. Of course, but for that you should be more judicious with the no of words you use. Not just the no. of words, also the 'kind' of words. I won't tell u what it means ;-). You interpret it your way. Of course, read poetry before u attempt to write. :-)
By the way, your prose is good. The fact that u not just care about the details but can put them out with ur own perception, makes me say that.
Well.. even this comment is not to discourage u from writing poetry (nor is is to encourage u to write loads of prose ;-D).
well..u wont believe.. there were some ppl who told me that my poem..err.. this work was real good.. ;) and got it personally conveyed it to me.. :)
yeah.. and as you say.. need to read quite some poetry.. the beauty of poetry being that, the whole thing is abstract, yet not so abstract...
Abstract is for me, for u, and for ... and that too in different ways, different levels blah blah. 'abstract'ness is not *contained* in the 'thing' or the 'whole thing'.
thts what i meant.. the 'whole thing' or the poem is abstract to the person who is reading it..
and hey.. wanted to ask you.. any poems from you of late?
Well.. keep watiching my webspace regularly. If not poems, u'll definitely find something or the other, and sometimes interesting too, and at times good. :-)
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